Monday, February 12, 2007
My Rage-cause
I was angry when i knew that Footlocker didn't had my shoe size on the shoe that i wanted. So i went to Sheik and i asked if they had the shoes that i wanted and they told me yes. But the problem was that they didn't had my shoes size so i was so angry. So now i have to go today and look for them at another mall.
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3 comments:
Hahaha! I can soo relate to you.
When I was shopping for my graduation dress, I found this really cool black dress, but they didn't have it in my size, so we went to another mall, they still didn't have it. Then we went to the another mall, they finally had it! :D
I liked how you kept saying "i was angry, i was angry." It just sounded more real to your piece.
My suggestions, you could go into a little more detail. But other than that, Great job! :D
I think many people can relate to this piece. I agree with Amiry and I think you could add more description and length but I still felt that it was good. I really liked how you just focused on one thing that made you angry. I am pretty sure that anybody would go on forever if they were writing about the causes of their rage.
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